@KitRedgrave We can even give you a more current edition than we have up on the main page, let us know what you think!

http://egypt.urnash.com/parallax/chapter-1-wip/

@zebratron2084 oh gosh thanks ​

i'm pretty sure i'm already throwing money on the patreon

@zebratron2084 only a few pages in and already loving this. y'all are making something great

@KitRedgrave Aww geez. *blushes half to death*

Thank you so much for saying that—honestly, we've been immersed in this project for so long, @anthracite and I genuinely couldn't tell if it's turning out wonderful or terrible. :D

@zebratron2084 @anthracite i'm not far enough in to know how good the story is yet, but i'm certainly hooked. the art is really visually striking and i'm a huge fan

@zebratron2084 @anthracite wanna see where this goes and what the hell everything is

@zebratron2084 @anthracite now i've gone past all the finished art, and finally getting some idea of what all this might be

@zebratron2084 @anthracite alright. neat! if "lost but strangely invested in what the hell is going on" is what y'all were going for, you did it :D

@zebratron2084 oops, i forgot to pledge to the patreon actually. fixed it

@KitRedgrave Thank you so much! And yeah, it's okay if it's a little confusing in the first chapter, there's gonna be a LOT more context about both societies in the second chapter!

@KitRedgrave (Also, there are a lot of edits for clarity planned in the publication draft—do please let us know if there's any plot point you find really confusing or frustrating! That's exactly the sort of thing we're on the lookout for right now...)

@zebratron2084 i will say that it was a little disorienting not really knowing what was going on with the characters -- they seem to be in one place, and then suddenly a totally different one looking different. though i can figure that's because they really are in two different places at once and different

@KitRedgrave Hmm. That is kind of something we were concerned about. Could I trouble you for a couple of specific examples? We could probably either work on some stronger transitions or drop in some extra dialogue to fix it.

And thank you so, so very much for your feedback. We have been kinda starving for this. <3 I'm so glad it's at least looking good, but I am concerned we're running the story a little too fast for it to be easy to follow—this has been a concern of mine since the start...

@KitRedgrave Oh! If you're talking about the bit where Kirt (bird) and Noa (pony) are having their first contact with the cat and mouse from the other side, while the Big Monstery Thing smashes stuff—yeah, that's a known issue. :D

That is indeed taking place in two places at once, and we have a note to tack a "meanwhile..." on that. :>

Sorry to flood you with text by the way, we're just so excited you're liking it! ^____^

@zebratron2084 that was also kinda confounding, though i could kinda infer by them not immediately flipping out that it was happening somewhere else. definitely better to make that explicit!

this makes a lot more sense the next go-around reading it, but there's still a lot going on that's unexplained and packed in

@zebratron2084 and i was afraid i was spamming you with text! ^_^;;

@KitRedgrave It is very very packed. :) I've been arguing that to @anthracite since the start, since she is very "aww, they'll puzzle it out!" about the whole thing. She kinda takes her perceptual skills for granted sometimes and forgets that I, for example, am not half as detail-oriented as her. :)

@zebratron2084 alright, it seems like the first thing is in page 14, where we see different designs for the two main characters that we can tell by the colors that they are them. (maybe colorblind people will have trouble with that?)

like, what are hostframes? some sort of armor thing? i guess so. i would've caught that if i were reading a little more carefully ^_^;

page 25, there they are again. i could be fooled into thinking those things could, like, autonomously do things. one frame out of it, next frame already in go-mode flying wherever.

@KitRedgrave OH! I get it! ^_^

Yeah, they are inside the gigantic versions of themselves that they hopped out of when they first arrived on the station! Hostframes are basically big ol' biological mecha. They show up at the beginning when they hook them up to the local plantlife—they're the things that are taking the samples from the trees. And on p25 you can kinda see them hopping inside them.

We can add a little more detail about that in the dialogue, though! And I might make @anthracite add a clearer transition, maybe another panel early on where we can see them enter their frames in DETAIL. Kirt and Noa are always either hopping into or out of them really fast, now that I go back and look, and... that is kinda confusing.

Thank you! This is all FANTASTIC and I'm making a note to thank you in the acknowledgments.

Would you like a cameo in Chapter 2 (if we get that far) to show our appreciation? <3

@zebratron2084 @anthracite it would've helped to, like, see them coming into the station in the mecha and then exiting them, to establish that that is what they are.

aww heck! um, i'd like that a lot if you can fit it in, but no obligation >w<; and i don't feel like i'm doing all that much work here ;p

@KitRedgrave @anthracite Oh, believe me, it's no trouble—especially if you want to be one of the Mixolynes (Kirt and Noa's side, the space-hippie dryads) instead of the Vek-10 (the other side of the story, the cat and mouse techno-monks). We have a HUGE PARTY SCENE coming up on that side. :)

@zebratron2084 @anthracite oh gosh! kit could really kinda fit in either side, but can definitely be space hippie for convenience of drawing :3 thanks a lot!!

@hummingrain Here's the link for our version, everything Peg's done so far—not sure if the page I was just talking about is up, though! If you get around to checking it out, let us know what you think!

http://egypt.urnash.com/parallax/chapter-1-wip/