@KitRedgrave Hmm. That is kind of something we were concerned about. Could I trouble you for a couple of specific examples? We could probably either work on some stronger transitions or drop in some extra dialogue to fix it.

And thank you so, so very much for your feedback. We have been kinda starving for this. <3 I'm so glad it's at least looking good, but I am concerned we're running the story a little too fast for it to be easy to follow—this has been a concern of mine since the start...

@KitRedgrave Oh! If you're talking about the bit where Kirt (bird) and Noa (pony) are having their first contact with the cat and mouse from the other side, while the Big Monstery Thing smashes stuff—yeah, that's a known issue. :D

That is indeed taking place in two places at once, and we have a note to tack a "meanwhile..." on that. :>

Sorry to flood you with text by the way, we're just so excited you're liking it! ^____^

@zebratron2084 that was also kinda confounding, though i could kinda infer by them not immediately flipping out that it was happening somewhere else. definitely better to make that explicit!

this makes a lot more sense the next go-around reading it, but there's still a lot going on that's unexplained and packed in

@zebratron2084 and i was afraid i was spamming you with text! ^_^;;

@KitRedgrave It is very very packed. :) I've been arguing that to @anthracite since the start, since she is very "aww, they'll puzzle it out!" about the whole thing. She kinda takes her perceptual skills for granted sometimes and forgets that I, for example, am not half as detail-oriented as her. :)

@zebratron2084 alright, it seems like the first thing is in page 14, where we see different designs for the two main characters that we can tell by the colors that they are them. (maybe colorblind people will have trouble with that?)

like, what are hostframes? some sort of armor thing? i guess so. i would've caught that if i were reading a little more carefully ^_^;

page 25, there they are again. i could be fooled into thinking those things could, like, autonomously do things. one frame out of it, next frame already in go-mode flying wherever.

@KitRedgrave OH! I get it! ^_^

Yeah, they are inside the gigantic versions of themselves that they hopped out of when they first arrived on the station! Hostframes are basically big ol' biological mecha. They show up at the beginning when they hook them up to the local plantlife—they're the things that are taking the samples from the trees. And on p25 you can kinda see them hopping inside them.

We can add a little more detail about that in the dialogue, though! And I might make @anthracite add a clearer transition, maybe another panel early on where we can see them enter their frames in DETAIL. Kirt and Noa are always either hopping into or out of them really fast, now that I go back and look, and... that is kinda confusing.

Thank you! This is all FANTASTIC and I'm making a note to thank you in the acknowledgments.

Would you like a cameo in Chapter 2 (if we get that far) to show our appreciation? <3

@zebratron2084 @anthracite it would've helped to, like, see them coming into the station in the mecha and then exiting them, to establish that that is what they are.

aww heck! um, i'd like that a lot if you can fit it in, but no obligation >w<; and i don't feel like i'm doing all that much work here ;p

@KitRedgrave @anthracite Oh, believe me, it's no trouble—especially if you want to be one of the Mixolynes (Kirt and Noa's side, the space-hippie dryads) instead of the Vek-10 (the other side of the story, the cat and mouse techno-monks). We have a HUGE PARTY SCENE coming up on that side. :)

@zebratron2084 @anthracite oh gosh! kit could really kinda fit in either side, but can definitely be space hippie for convenience of drawing :3 thanks a lot!!