Writing
Part of it is this is my very first science-fiction story, and there's a lot more pre-writing that I should have done. Really nailing down the world of the Society, exactly what the tech level is, and how things work is pretty important in the creation of informed and fully-realized characters. Who knew?? I'm muscling through the first draft now, but I also need to make sure I know what to focus on in the revision.
Writing
Still, it's exciting -- I think this is the first time I've written something that is so far short of what's in my head and I haven't been discouraged or quit. I know I can get it closer, but I need it out first so I know more about what I'm working with. I think there are ways to punch up the prurient interests bit for folks WHILE leaning in to character and setting the way I'd like. It'll just take some thought and elbow grease.