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I'm going to watch @adeptomega play Major/Minor and critique the narrative as we go.
Great Work help me.
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We're at the first possible narrative split and we've decided this has to be the Furry 4Kids dub.
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Could someone please pick a tense and stick with it? I don't care which one. Just pick one.
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"Only given the concrete details last week" for a life-altering tour? An NDA for a publicity tour? This isn't a tour; it's a self-kidnapping.
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"Maid Cafes?
Those were much like restaurants in western culture.
However, your waitress actually stays at your table.
You converse with them, play games, get to know them..."
THIS IS AN EXACT LINE FROM THE ACTUAL GAME. HOLY BLAP.
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"Earlier that day,
In the courtrooms of Terra.
A planet far from Earth;
Yet closer than was known to any."
WHAT IS WRONG AND WHO DID THIS TO YOU?
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@irisjaycomics So far it appears to be PORQUE NO LOS DOS while I do a kickflip off of a gargantuan copy of Elements of Style and double-flip-off my editor, then fall flat on my back and break my collarbone on my own hubris.
