Empress of Mars: Undisputed @zebratron2084@awoo.space

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🎵​transom cat, transom cat
🎵​fickle neighborhood transom cat
🎵in our window she has sat
🎵too many treats have made her fat
🎵look out, here lurks the transom cat

@kelseyhusky The Jackalope Queen has your backs. =}:3

@001zlnv Ooh, is that the reason? OK, that sounds like a fine excuse, I'm in...

@001zlnv No, but I was practically married to one for most of a decade, do I get partial credit?

I should go ratty someday though. I've always had a soft spot for the little cuties.

@Aradia "Oh hai estrogen!" "Johnn... I mean Jenny, you're our favorite customer!"

#KirschRemakesTheRoom

@Balina (yes Ashley should DEFINITELY get 6 eyes—oh wait is that not what you were intending?)

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@KitRedgrave @anthracite Oh, believe me, it's no trouble—especially if you want to be one of the Mixolynes (Kirt and Noa's side, the space-hippie dryads) instead of the Vek-10 (the other side of the story, the cat and mouse techno-monks). We have a HUGE PARTY SCENE coming up on that side. :)

@KitRedgrave It is very very packed. :) I've been arguing that to @anthracite since the start, since she is very "aww, they'll puzzle it out!" about the whole thing. She kinda takes her perceptual skills for granted sometimes and forgets that I, for example, am not half as detail-oriented as her. :)

@KitRedgrave OH! I get it! ^_^

Yeah, they are inside the gigantic versions of themselves that they hopped out of when they first arrived on the station! Hostframes are basically big ol' biological mecha. They show up at the beginning when they hook them up to the local plantlife—they're the things that are taking the samples from the trees. And on p25 you can kinda see them hopping inside them.

We can add a little more detail about that in the dialogue, though! And I might make @anthracite add a clearer transition, maybe another panel early on where we can see them enter their frames in DETAIL. Kirt and Noa are always either hopping into or out of them really fast, now that I go back and look, and... that is kinda confusing.

Thank you! This is all FANTASTIC and I'm making a note to thank you in the acknowledgments.

Would you like a cameo in Chapter 2 (if we get that far) to show our appreciation? <3

@KitRedgrave Oh! If you're talking about the bit where Kirt (bird) and Noa (pony) are having their first contact with the cat and mouse from the other side, while the Big Monstery Thing smashes stuff—yeah, that's a known issue. :D

That is indeed taking place in two places at once, and we have a note to tack a "meanwhile..." on that. :>

Sorry to flood you with text by the way, we're just so excited you're liking it! ^____^

@KitRedgrave Hmm. That is kind of something we were concerned about. Could I trouble you for a couple of specific examples? We could probably either work on some stronger transitions or drop in some extra dialogue to fix it.

And thank you so, so very much for your feedback. We have been kinda starving for this. <3 I'm so glad it's at least looking good, but I am concerned we're running the story a little too fast for it to be easy to follow—this has been a concern of mine since the start...

@KitRedgrave (Also, there are a lot of edits for clarity planned in the publication draft—do please let us know if there's any plot point you find really confusing or frustrating! That's exactly the sort of thing we're on the lookout for right now...)

@KitRedgrave Thank you so much! And yeah, it's okay if it's a little confusing in the first chapter, there's gonna be a LOT more context about both societies in the second chapter!

@KitRedgrave Aww geez. *blushes half to death*

Thank you so much for saying that—honestly, we've been immersed in this project for so long, @anthracite and I genuinely couldn't tell if it's turning out wonderful or terrible. :D

@hummingrain Here's the link for our version, everything Peg's done so far—not sure if the page I was just talking about is up, though! If you get around to checking it out, let us know what you think!

http://egypt.urnash.com/parallax/chapter-1-wip/

@KitRedgrave We can even give you a more current edition than we have up on the main page, let us know what you think!

http://egypt.urnash.com/parallax/chapter-1-wip/

ok, you grown-up queer furries had BETTER like parallax, because i am not so sure the panel peg just drew is entirely suitable for kids :O

upped the emotional intensity of the story by about 300% though

fuck! i (unironically) hope she's proud, she even got a reaction out of the AUTHOR and i knew this plot element was coming

just... poignance lit with rocket fuel, holy shit